Posted by Miss Crowther | Posted in Literacy | Posted on May 4, 2014

We are reading and writing narratives. Narratives tell a story to entertain an audience. They have a beginning, middle and end, characters and can be set anywhere. The storyline is called the plot. We used a graphic organiser to find these features in a picture storybook called The ANZAC Puppy.


We also used the above organiser to plan our own narratives. When we started drafting we had to experiment with different ways to ‘hook’ a reader and make them want to continue reading.Β We had toΒ try four different opening sentences before writing our opening paragraph.Β We had to try:

* An action

* A noise

* Dialogue

* Short and sharp

Here are some examples of how Aidan decided he could start his narrative:

I was hanging on for dear life as Dad fish tailed up the hill.

Vrooom, vroom.


Dad killed it.



Which opening sentence do you think Aidan should use? Why?


Narratives also have interesting words that help the reader to picture what is happening.Β  We have added lots of words to our class word collector this week and will be trying to use them in our writing.


What interesting words have you read this week? What do they mean?


What interesting words have you used in your writing this week?


Comments (20)

The opening sentence in stories is so important. I have noticed when I visit classes that our students are much more aware of its importance and are developing great opening hook sentences. I love all of your choices Aidan. I would select the first one if it was my story as it paints a very clear picture in my head and makes me feel curious about what is going to happen.
Good luck with your stories grade 5/6!

I love the first option! I really want to hear about what happens next. The story sounds exciting!

I now can’t wait until I hear it! I think the first option is best.

I love to write. I could read or write all day!


Hi 5/6 T.E.A.M, Mrs Placek and Miss Crowther,

What do you think Aidan’s first sentence should be?
I think Aidan’s sentence should be ‘Dad killed it’ because it is interesting and it will get the reader’s attention.

I found the word obey and I am not sure at all of what it means!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ (too many faces)

What do you like about reading narratives?

Olivia S

Hi everyone,

I think ‘Dad killed it’ would be good because he could make the readers wonder what it was that dad killed! It would make me want to read more and more for sure. Maybe later on he could say something like “Remember that snake you killed Dad?”

I read these words this week:
Veteran means extremely experienced, Absconder which means secretly running away and endanger which means to put someone or something in danger.

I put assailant in my writing which means an attacker, atom which is a small particle and anonymous which means unknown.

Bye for now.
Cam πŸ™‚

Hi Cam,

A high quality blog comment. Well done!

I agree, ‘Dad killed it’ makes me want to keep reading as well. Can’t wait to find out how Aidan’s narrative unfolds. I’m looking forward to reading the rest of yours as well. Great vocabulary!

Happy writing and blogging!

Miss Crowther πŸ™‚

Hello everyone,

What I think Aidan should put in is maybe the noise because I think it goes with it.

I have assailant as an interesting word which means a attacker.

Assailant and atom.

bye everyone.


Hi guys

Lovely to see your narrative research inspired by my book The Anzac Puppy. Keep up the good work!


New Zealand

Hello Mr Millett,

I really enjoyed your book The ANZAC Puppy.

Thank you for posting a comment on our blog. It was very nice of you to do that, thanks :). How did you find our blog post?

Hope you can reply.

Happy blogging πŸ™‚

Hello from Australia Pete!

Thanks for taking the time to comment on our blog, we love to see new names pop up and know that we are connecting with people from different parts of the world.
We enjoyed reading your book The Anzac Puppy. It was one of a few books we read in the lead up to ANZAC Day. We used your book for writing and for some of our reading strategies too, because we learnt to Compare & Contrast, using the writing and illustrations with your book and another book about ANZAC Day. What inspired you to write about the story? Do you have any other books?

From the 5/6 Team

Hi 5/6 team,

I think Aidan should use a noise because it would make it sound real. I put a noise in mine and it made it sound way better.

Bye for now
From Brent

My interesting words were (oh I found them in a dictionary):
Gloomy – as in gloomy whether
President – the president is some one who takes care of the country
and lastly academy – is a well trained facility for sport.

Hey 5/6s

I think Aidan should use
“He Killed it”
It would make the reader want to keep reading.

I haven’t found any interesting words πŸ™

Hi everyone,

I love writing narratives, because they can be silly and be really funny and you can also turn your narrative into a play, or a movie.

I think Aidan should use the first one: I WAS HANGING ON FOR DEAR LIFE AS DAD FISH TAILED UP THE HILL.

Happy blogging! πŸ™‚

Hey Tish,

I agree with you. I enjoyed writing narratives because you can add humour to your story. I loved working with you, giving you ideas and you giving me great ideas!

I really, really love my opening sentence, “Don’t hit that fence you pineapple!!!” ahahahhahaha lol

Also what about the Nemo part hahahahahhaha!! ;):)

Happy replying! πŸ™‚ :0 πŸ™‚

From your bestfriend always Billie!!!!! πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚

Hi Tanyshah

I love writing narratives as well they can be really really really funny

bye for now

Hello Everyone,

I think Aiden should start his story with
Vroom, vroom.
It would make the reader want to find out more if you don’t tell them much or give them any clues to what will happen.

A list of interesting words that I have found are:
I have found those words in my book, but I don’t know all of the meanings.

Interesting words I have used are:
shine (not sunshine)
and many more

Happy blogging
From Kaitlyn

Hi 5/6 Team,

I used the fourth one. DAD KILLED IT.

Bye Everyone

Hello world!

5 motivating words I found the meaning to are;
1. Counterespionage = One government spying on another government.
2. Cipher = the digit 0 (Zero)
3. Chiropractor = A method on curing a disease
4. Decipher = To find the meaning to a word that is hard to understand
5.Photographer = A person who takes photos for weddings, dance photos, parties, etc professionally.

That’s all have time for!
From, Tayla-Jade

Hello everyone

I am looking forward to reading everyone’s finished narratives!

I like all of Aidan’s possible story starters. I think the first one and the last one are going to grab the readers’ attention the most! ‘Dad killed it’ makes me wonder about what Dad killed and why.

Isn’t it interesting how there were different opinions though? It shows that we are all interested in reading different things and different types of stories. I wonder who Aidan’s intended audience is and how it might have influenced the way he decided to write his narrative?

Mrs Placek

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